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I’m so tired of this dream
That will never come true
I just want to sleep
But pins and needles
Keep my eyes forced open

I wish I could lay
Down and die
Just so that I
Don’t have to breathe
Anymore empty air

I want to be free
From all this pain
In the shadow tree
Of the insane
Let me be alone

Don’t talk to me
Don’t let me see
Don’t force me to
Hang on to this
Broken frame

Inside the picture
Is where I want
To be eternally
The image of happiness
I can never get back

Wrap myself in
The sheets of life
So that death can
Keep me warm
From the cold

Hate me
Love me
Hurt me
Kill me
Save me
©2008-2009 ~Night-Hawk77
:iconnight-hawk77:

Author's Comments

I mixed a few diffrent styles into one... so anyway, I think I may be getting back a little into my old writtings habits... this may not be good, but I feel better about it than my last three.

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:iconsharnia:
A very depressing poem but it's rather good. It flows very well, I like all the short verses.

"Rap myself in
The sheets of life"
I think the "rap" is supposed to be "Wrap"?

Anyways, I liked that particular stanza a lot. The idea of death keeping one warm is bizarre and very nice.

--
Triste est omne animal post coitum.

"Caught a lite sneeze. Dreamed a little dream.
Made my own pretty hate machine."
:iconflynn-the-cat:
Anymore empty air
...any more?
Aaaand that's all the typoes XD

I like this bit the most
I want to be free
From all this pain
In the shadow tree
Of the insane
Let me be alone


...it is also one of the only bits with regular rhyme the nonryhming throws you off in places (esp at the beginning when you don't expect it). That's more a style thing though...

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:iconresistiveloss:
I like this particular stanza a lot and I totally agree with your last setence!
The idea of death keeping one warm is very nice indeed and a bit of.. unique I must admit.

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*Σε ευχαριστώ για την πίστη.
--
A hug makes the world spin! :3 ....
:iconnight-hawk77:
Oh thanks for the typo pointing out... I'll fix that XD and thanks for your comments :)

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My Only Salvation...Lies In Damnation
:iconsharnia:
You're welcome.

--
Triste est omne animal post coitum.

"Caught a lite sneeze. Dreamed a little dream.
Made my own pretty hate machine."
:iconinspirational-dreams:
I really like how its full of mixed emotions and how it ends.. some may say they don't like it.. because its repetitive.. but I like it... to me its like the last punch to knock you out. Nice work :D

--
"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who
mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind."
- Dr. Seuss


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:icon626elemental:
I agree with the others, the stanza with "wrap me in the sheets of life" is very good.

--
Just because you're paranoid doesn't mean there isn't an invisible deamon out to eat your face.

We put the FUN in FUNerals!
:iconopheliawhispers:
I like this one...'tis lovely. I like the imagery of death keeping you warm, not cold. Cool.

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:love:

-Ophelia

"The accumulated filth of all their sex and murder will foam up about their waist's and all the whores and politicians will look up and shout "Save Us!"

And I'll look down and whisper "No."

-Rorschach from "Watchmen"
:iconkabirawhisper:
It's very siple, yet very nice. I always like when people can express themselves in short sentences. Good job.

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I have heard there are troubles of more than one kind. Some come from ahead, and some come from behind. But I've brought a big bat. I'm all ready, you see. Now my troubles are going to have trouble with me.

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